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Re: A girl's pride
Cool anime picture! My friend loves drawing these kinds of people. I like the shading, but she really needs a background. A bit more definition and smoothing out her mouth ...
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Re: Cerberus
I've got only one criticism: the head in profile view has too round of a mouth. That's it, though. It is so cool! I draw, and now you're making me ...
Jan 11, 2009 -
Re: You Know You Want Some [re-opened]
This one's realistic, adventure-ish fiction. It's the first thousand or so words of a short story. Some of the odd details will be explained later on in the story, so ...
Jan 11, 2009 -
Re: The Thorn on the Rose
Unwind my fingers From around your wrists scratch the around. Push my face away, push away my face would sound better. And tell me it's for the best. Telling me ...
Jan 11, 2009 -
Re: I'll have a review extra value meal,
I have a lyric...a sort of a love song. Here it is. thanks! Cheers. --Vox
Jan 11, 2009 -
Re: Diary of a Seventh grade Girl
All I have to say is this: You Are Lucky. I'm not in school right now because I have Tourette's syndrome, which makes my body do stuff, like say the ...
Jan 11, 2009 -
Re: The Banker and the Slaughter's Boys *working title
This is a story about...well, I'll see if you can figure it out. Besides, prefacing it would basically ruin this bit of the plot. But this is just the beginning. ...
Jan 11, 2009 -
Re: When The World Melts Away
I hope I don't sound too harsh, but I tend to start with crit, so here goes: The first stanza thingy didn't make any sense to me. I got this ...
Jan 11, 2009 -
Re: Mask of Sanity--Prologue
Uh...you're lacking emotion. Serial killers are passionate and secretive people. Go to and type in serial killers. They have an awesome article on the subject. Do the research-it'll pay off.
Jan 11, 2009 -
Re: An Awful Disease's Parodox: the pain of contortions
This happened to me today, called dystonic reaction....a reaction to a drug I took for Tourette's.... Read my other poems like 'an obstinate disease' or 'in the shattered mirror,' or ...
Jan 8, 2009 -
Re: 'You're my reason,' a love song with three different parts
Uhm..this is my first 'lyric,' and one of the few songs I've actually attempted writing. Feedback is welcomed...including whether or not you think it would be worth setting to music. ...
Jan 6, 2009 -
Re: my inner editor
I am a blunt and literal and down to business person, so I may seem harsh... Please, please do not take it personally. I'm just pointing out mistakes or other ...
Jan 6, 2009 -
Re: Pure White Walls
Wow. That was good. I just have to wonder: what was his past? This guy's past? Did he do something to get him commited to an institution, or are the ...
Jan 4, 2009 -
Re: A Different Kind of Normal- Part One
Wooow. This...this is good. This is more than good, this is...very good. I love it. I didn't find barely a thing wrong with it. Here's one tip: change verbs more ...
Jan 4, 2009 -
Re: In a Way No Human Could...a poem about my dog
I find odes to be tedious, so this isn't an 'ode', but it is a poem about a particular uhm, not object, but, animal. Anyway, my poem.... ..................... Soft, bristly ...
Jan 4, 2009
